POS (personal outer space) EDIT

HELLO EVERYONE!
Thanks for all the comments and discussion! It was the best online critique I’ve ever participated in. Evan took what I had and made many amazing improvements. Then I made a few tiny changes, and here we are! Any feedback or comments? I think we have a winner here. Now for the unveiling:
The design!
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Ugh, I didn’t realize the acronym until Ben mentioned it. I’m not sure how I feel about this. I hope no one goes around calling it the POS show, I would seriously feel awful. At least our postcards won’t be POS.

I’m not sure what to go with here. If anyone has any input, please feel free. I’m thinking the last one is the best, but if anyone feels there is a better way to approach the design, let me know. We can go in a totally different direction.

Option 1Option 2Option 3
The third one sections off areas and makes different spaces. So maybe that’s the best one?

PS- I’m not exactly sure what’s going on with Shambot right now, but I know for sure Joel is on the case!

Comments (17) left to “POS (personal outer space) EDIT”

  1. Steven wrote:

    The postcards look really nice. I like the colors a lot.

  2. Allison wrote:

    yeah bill, the colors are really great, simple. I think i personally like the first and last ones. and i think that you dont have to literally draw out the “space” like in the last one in order for it to work. i think the space in the first one is nice too, and apparent.

    woa, crit mode out of nowhere…

  3. Bill Ferenc wrote:

    I like the way the first one works too because you can read ‘personal space’ if you flip it. It makes some awkward areas in the corners though.

  4. Emma wrote:

    I know you always say that a dotted line makes everything better…. so maybe the third one?

    Really, though, I like all of them! I think it just depends on how you want people to view the postcard, maybe? Like, the second one conveys the message more simply, but the first one makes nice use of the actual space of the postcard. I DON’T KNOW! hm.

  5. Evan wrote:

    i do like the third one. it doesnt hit you over the head with it, but it is more than type. i really think we should all try to do some sweet graphics and maybe pick or combine the best ones. LETS COLABORATE PEOPLE

  6. Bill wrote:

    The thing is, I need to get this order out by Monday the latest. If anyone wants the Illustrator file to work from, just let me know and I can email it to you or put it on the shambot server.

  7. Emma wrote:

    p.s. are we still sneaking me into the show? i’m totally into that, dude.

  8. Bill wrote:

    Yeah!

  9. Bill wrote:

    And it’s totally okay, don’t worry about it. She advised against it, but it’s our show, and I’m curating it. I think the exhibition would benefit from your piece because it actually creates a new space to experience. If anyone has any problems they’ll just have to deal!

  10. Evan wrote:

    dude, i can totally rock that out before monday. i got like a ton of other projects going on right now, why not another to pass the time?

  11. pthompso wrote:

    I was really attracted to the first one at first. It’s interactive!. But as I look at them again, I think the third one is a really smart, sharp design. It’s true that you don’t have to literally draw out the space, and the second one is boldly open and brutishly empty at the top, but the way that the dotted lines work in the third one (they are all derived from the text, but there is symmetry coming from outer space and asymmetry coming from personal) is very clever. I vote that you just go with number three.

  12. patrick wrote:

    Bill I submitted my idea for a postcard/entry for the show. K THX BYE!

  13. Evan wrote:

    you dont think its a little too sparse with only the red lines?
    also, id have to see it printed, but it looks like the green might be a little too faint, we might have to beef it up in width or in color.

  14. Evan wrote:

    scratch that last comment, its intimate.

  15. Ben wrote:

    ding!

  16. Emma wrote:

    DING INTIMACEY!!!

  17. Allison wrote:

    agreed, a little intimacy never hurt anyone. good job with the collaboration everyone! Bill, I am totally siked (is that really how you spell siked?)about this show. Let me know if there is some sort of specific way you want me to get my prints framed??? matte no matte, pine frame, black, white? thick thin? I want your input.