Feed me back
Okay, so here’s my working script for my movie this semester. I’m not really happy with the story, I just think it’s kind of weird and doesn’t really go anywhere. Also, the ending is abrupt. I’m just not really sure about it. What do you’se guys think?
Timmy wrote:
Ben, following our discussion I think you’re fine. This isn’t a movie about a real life guy who dreams, it’s about the world of dreams and how disjoint they can be. I can’t wait to see how it turns out.
Posted on 05-Mar-07 at 1:31 pm | Permalink
Maggie wrote:
Weird, but i like it and i really want to see it. I think it would be cool if he had a shape or color or something going through the story to give it some continuity. And if you do that you can pretend it represents something really deep and profound. Which is always fun to do. “Rabbit” (See what i mean)
Posted on 05-Mar-07 at 9:20 pm | Permalink
patrick wrote:
I am sure you will have graphic continuity and whatnots. Because you were hinting at it in your screenplay. I wouldn’t worry about it. I think you just need to make sure the lack of narrative structure doesn’t make you get lazy and bring the sauce when it comes to pre-production. It seems like this might be a lot of work. But you can totally pull it off. I dunno, I guess it really depends on what you are trying to achieve. Also what is the estimated run-time. Sounds good, and Artsy, not so much on the fartsy though.
Posted on 06-Mar-07 at 12:22 am | Permalink
patrick wrote:
That last comment had a lot of sentence fragments, sorry.
Posted on 06-Mar-07 at 12:23 am | Permalink
pthompso wrote:
After I read the script, then looked back at the title, I thought “oh, I know, he needs to wake up and find his phone ringing”. Then I read Tim’s comment. It sounds like you already had that discussion. And I totally agree with the conclusions of it.
In regard to Patrick’s comments re: sauce. At first I thought “he means production, not pre-production, right?”. But then I realized, you can’t get your shots if you haven’t planned your shots. This would be a movie to have a detailed storyboard for. And its going to take some casting and acquiring of props and locations.
For the end, I can imagine a shot sequence that builds suspense and then a sudden cut to black, maybe even in the middle of or before the word “hello”. For some reason I’m thinking of the look and feel of Primer.
Of course, the movie that I am guessing helped to inspire yours is The Science of Sleep. Rented it. Haven’t watched it yet. I’ll get back to you.
Posted on 06-Mar-07 at 8:54 am | Permalink